DoctorFace
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http://www.thepostgame.com/features/201101/why-isnt-mike-vanderjagt-still-kicking-nfl
Gonna Buy me a Dog said:Well done piece.
But ... he does kind of gloss over that 2006 season. Vanderjagt was tied for last in the NFL at 72 percent.
So to reduce that to he "made more than 72 percent of his attempts that year. Bill Parcells still cut him."
Intellectually dishonest right there.
But very good piece.
Alma said:Well, gee, I guess I seem like the jerk again. I thought it had considerable flaws.
It's a 1,500-word story masquerading as a 2,500-word story. A lot of writing - larded with unfounded opinions - for the sake of it. Just a simple example:
<i>He’s 40 now, and although that’s old for pretty much any athlete, it’s not old for a kicker. John Carney is still active at 46. Morten Anderson kicked until 47. And here’s Vanderjagt, in game shape, planning to go out to a high school field the next day to boot a few. “I should be the kicker for the New Orleans Saints,” he says, sipping a Pepsi. Vanderjagt was always blustery, but usually he was right. And let’s face it: lots of NFL teams have kickers worse than Vanderjagt.
So why is this man sitting here alone in a pizza place? </i>
could easily be...
<i>He’s 40 now, but John Carney is still active at 46. Morten Anderson kicked until 47. And Vanderjagt is in game shape, planning to go out to a high school field the next day to boot a few.
“I should be the kicker for the New Orleans Saints,” he says, sipping a Pepsi.
So why is this man sitting here alone in a pizza place?</i>
Did we lose much there? I contend no. The ages of Carney and Mort speak to 40 not being old for a kicker, the quote speaks for Vanderjagt's blustery nature. Adelson's opinion - that Vanderjagt is apparently better than many kickers, including Garrett Hartley - has no right or wrong answer (it's unproven) so it's needless.
Another:
<i>"He sits at a high-top away from the bar, in front of two magazine covers. The first features Peyton, and it’s signed in black Sharpie. The second features Vanderjagt himself. “They darkened my eyes to make me look evil,” he says. Of course that charge sounds like paranoid psychobabble. But Vanderjagt’s eyes are light blue. On the magazine cover, they are almost black. The story inside is well-told and sympathetic –- hardly an effort to portray evil – but after sitting with Vanderjagt for two hours, it’s hard not to think of the old joke about how you’re not paranoid if they’re really out to get you."</i>
reads better to me as:
<i>"He sits at a high-top away from the bar, in front of two magazine covers. The first features Peyton, and it’s signed in black Sharpie. The second features Vanderjagt himself.
“They darkened my eyes to make me look evil,” he says.
Vanderjagt’s eyes are light blue."</i>
Let the reader decide. It makes for better momentum anyway.
And if you want to know why Vanderjagt isn't kicking in the NFL, you could always call up a few NFL GMs and get their takes off the record. Just because Mike Vanderjagt doesn't know doesn't mean the reader has to be clueless about it.