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little late posting this, but good writing never gets old.

this was one of those topics -- suicide of a local prep player -- that makes you want to run the other way...Jeremy Trantham looked at it straight in the eye.

http://www.blueridgenow.com/article/20090116/NEWS/901150182
 
Respectfully disagree. I'm sure there was other coverage that gave this it's context, but this seemed self-indulgent. The "oh, if I could only talk to the 13-year-old me" angle us a fine start, but nearly the whole column? Plus it assumes a great deal about the apparent suicide victim and why he did it -- telling him he's gonna marry a pretty girl someday won't help if he has major psychological issues or a physical problem that causes his brain to register nothing but depression.

On the other hand, he took a risk, and it was well-written. But I kinda think it misses the mark.
 
Mystery Meat said:
Respectfully disagree. I'm sure there was other coverage that gave this it's context, but this seemed self-indulgent. The "oh, if I could only talk to the 13-year-old me" angle us a fine start, but nearly the whole column? Plus it assumes a great deal about the apparent suicide victim and why he did it -- telling him he's gonna marry a pretty girl someday won't help if he has major psychological issues or a physical problem that causes his brain to register nothing but depression.

On the other hand, he took a risk, and it was well-written. But I kinds think it misses the mark.

Didn't want to be the first to say it, but I agree on pretty much all counts. It's definitely well-written, but it's a little too self-centered and glib.
 
Too much about him. And his theory only works for someone who ends up having a good life. What if the kid's 15-years-older self is a meth addict rotting in jail?
 
When I was in my first job out of college, I lived near a high school we covered and used to run three or four miles a day on their track, mostly b/c it was fenced in and I could bring my dog with him and let him run. It was a small town and kids from the football team were hanging around, and I got to know two or three of them better than others. We'd make small talk about local sports, they'd throw a ball for the dog when I was running, whatever.

They all played three sports, so as the sports year when on, I'd see them in various locker rooms, and, again, we'd bull**** a little if it was appropriate.

Then one day, one of them drove into the woods and blew his brains out. Girlfriend trouble. An amazingly impulsive and almost incomprehensible act.

So I wrote a column about the kids, and how I'd come to know them, and how absolutely senseless it seemed. Didn't try to figure anything out, just wrote a bit about the things above. Went to the funeral, parents appreciative, extremely sad.

And then a teacher from the school went crazy. Absolutely crazy. He claimed I was glorifying suicide and stories like mine led to copy cat suicides, and he tried to get me fired. Really tried to get me fired. Called the SE. Called the ME. Called the publisher, I think. Then confronted me at the school and forced me to listen to a good hour's worth of talk about how his wife worked with kids and he knew - just knew - that my column was a dangerous thing.

Thankfully the people I worked for did not share his viewpoint.
 
I never got to find out who comitted suicide because the writer was too busy babbling to himself about himself and bored me to death.
 
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As an aside, we're way too hard on writers around here.

It's a fine column with its heart in the right place. Could it be better? Sure, almost everything we write can better.
 
Jim_Carty said:
As an aside, we're way too hard on writers around here.

It's a fine column with its heart in the right place. Could it be better? Sure, almost everything we write can better.
I'm sort of there.

It's OK.... Not as good as Red at his successful parole hearing in Shawshank, but not **** either.
 
At what point does that column tell me who Jacob Swanson is and what happened to him?

It doesn't.

I have no idea what the point of the column is, other than the title of this thread.
 
spnited said:
At what point does that column tell me who Jacob Swanson is and what happened to him?

It doesn't.

I have no idea what the point of the column is, other than the title of this thread.

Maybe the people who would stop to read this guy's column already know the teen? Just a thought.
 
I know, but we don't know the context within this community.

If you wrote a column about Chesley B. "Sully" Sullenberger III last week in NY, you wouldn't have had to spend much time identifying him. Maybe it's a small community. Maybe it was packaged with a sidebar. I'm willing to give him the benefit of the doubt rather than run down another young writer without any context.
 
Michelle Hiskey said:
this was one of those topics -- suicide of a local prep player -- that makes you want to run the other way...Jeremy Trantham looked at it straight in the eye.

I don't think he came anywhere close to looking it straight in the eye.

I also didn't say it was bad, I agree with whoever said it missed the mark.

Even if everyone who picks up the paper knows what happened to Jacob Swanson, 99% of the column is about the writer...one sentence about Jacob Swanson.
 
Shoulda posted more context for this piece.

This column was published in western North Carolina, where there are a lot of small towns and in this case, people generally knew already about the circumstances of this kid's death.

The story was passed along to me by a acquaintance in that community, a retired schoolteacher who isn't that involved in sports; she's more into writing, and she keeps up with the paper so she knows when a story or column stands out (good or bad).

She recognized the risk that Jeremy took to write the column the way he did. It clearly didn't work for many SportsJournalists.com readers. But for her it did, to the point that she clipped it and gave it to an outsider (me).

Every day brings pitiful news of disaffected readers and newspapers dying. For me, her action was a small gleam of light that writing that takes a chance, can (still) connect powerfully with readers.
 
Like I said, Michelle, I think we're too hard around here sometimes.

And I appreciate the context. Newspapers are like a stock that's been absolutely battered so hard, and so long, that people don't see how much value remains. Hopefully that changes at some point.
 
Posted this thought before but seeing I in a story is just a turnoff. Takes me out of a story before I get into it.
 
DanOregon said:
Posted this thought before but seeing I in a story is just a turnoff. Takes me out of a story before I get into it.

Especially when it's used as much as this column.

Take out all the I's, somehow, and it would be better. It would capture me, and keep me there.
 
Michelle Hiskey said:
Shoulda posted more context for this piece.

This column was published in western North Carolina, where there are a lot of small towns and in this case, people generally knew already about the circumstances of this kid's death.

The story was passed along to me by a acquaintance in that community, a retired schoolteacher who isn't that involved in sports; she's more into writing, and she keeps up with the paper so she knows when a story or column stands out (good or bad).

She recognized the risk that Jeremy took to write the column the way he did. It clearly didn't work for many SportsJournalists.com readers. But for her it did, to the point that she clipped it and gave it to an outsider (me).

Every day brings pitiful news of disaffected readers and newspapers dying. For me, her action was a small gleam of light that writing that takes a chance, can (still) connect powerfully with readers.

Sure, Hendersonville had probably already published a story about the kid, but for Trantham to wait so long to get to his point? Big problem right there.

The lede wasn't so air-tight that his name couldn't have been placed a little higher in the story.
 
You think about it though, and death is all around sports. Sudden-death. Do or die. Blow the guy up. We shouldn't wonder why some people equate losing with a fate equal to death. Pathetic really.
 
The sentiment is great and the guy's heart is in the right place, but it really smacks of something I've read or heard before, not an original idea and not the most clever or "in the face" way to hit this. It's also hard for anyone to presume that they know what was bothering this 17 year old, or that his older self might tell him good things.
 

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