Run-on sentences, time/date/place addition

[farmerjerome]

Okay, this has driven me nuts in for the past six years.

After every high school sectional win, you have to put the time/date/place of the next game, as well as the opponent and name of the tournament (example, District V, Class AAAAA).
Most of the time it's gotta go in the first couple of grafs.

Is there anyway to get this info in without:

A. Breaking the rythym (sp) of the story.

B. Creating a sentence that is about 200 words by the time you're done.

 

[Chi City 81]

Not really just say, "With the victory, Podunk High advances to ... and will face Bum**** Central."

 

[daemon]

A good place to get information in is the first quote.

By JIMMY DEAN
Record Staff Writer
Hometown High entered its district quarterfinal showdown against Eastside High knowing it needed to get off to a quick start if it hoped to keep its dream season alive.
It did. And then some.
The Colts scored four touchdowns on their first four possessions then hung on for a wild 31-30 win over the Blazers Monday night.
"We played a great game," said Hometown High coach John Doe, whose Wildcats advance to face Crosstown High in the Class 4A, District 7 quarterfinals Friday. "We gave 110 percent."

 

[Appgrad05]

Another option is to put the info in a box on the front. Maybe put a helmet there, just to spice things up.

 

[DyePack]

Maybe put a helmet there, just to spice things up.

Damn, sometimes it's just too easy.

 

[Appgrad05]

Maybe put a helmet there, just to spice things up.

Damn, sometimes it's just too easy.

Exactly, since it was a jab at the long-ago thread that mentioned using helmets instead of logos.

 

[farmerjerome]

I've always been a fan of info boxes. That way people see it right off, and if they're retarded you can always throw it in at the end.

We did a helmet with a state championship team a few years ago. Except the helmet looked like an egg.

Kinda stupid, but I'm all for graphics.

 

[shotglass]

Careful, fj ... you're treading into dangerous territory. ;D

 

[farmerjerome]

Careful, fj ... you're treading into dangerous territory. ;D

I'm not scared, I only visit this board once every couple of months.

BTW, how do you guys feel about photo pages? I used to really like them, but the ones we've been running lately look like a bunch of pics fit together on a page.

Designers, any layout tips?

Keep in mind that I'm not a designer, and I'm down to writing once or twice a week. Read: I'm a little rusty.

 

[Chi City 81]

Careful, fj ... you're treading into dangerous territory. ;D

I'm not scared, I only visit this board once every couple of months.

BTW, how do you guys feel about photo pages? I used to really like them, but the ones we've been running lately look like a bunch of pics fit together on a page.

Designers, any layout tips?

Keep in mind that I'm not a designer, and I'm down to writing once or twice a week. Read: I'm a little rusty.

When I do photo spreads, I like to overlay some photos on top of each other. It gives it a layered effect. Tie it in with a good deck head that fits the spread, and that's all there is to it.

 

[shotglass]

I'd help, but I honestly think you might get better insight from DyePack ... he loves him some picture pages ...

 

[GoDeacs]

Not really just say, "With the victory, Podunk High advances to ... and will face Bum**** Central."

Why do you even have to say, "With the victory ...?" The loser doesn't advance.

As you probably can tell, I'm a copy editor and I've seen "with the victory" far too many times. And it gets deleted every time, yet still the same reporters keep recycling that worthless, space-killing phrase over and over and over ...

 

[Lyman_Bostock]

Not really just say, "With the victory, Podunk High advances to ... and will face Bum**** Central."

Why do you even have to say, "With the victory ...?" The loser doesn't advance.

As you probably can tell, I'm a copy editor and I've seen "with the victory" far too many times. And it gets deleted every time, yet still the same reporters keep recycling that worthless, space-killing phrase over and over and over ...

Indeed, the phrase is straight from the Department of Redundancy Department.

I'm assuming you refer to the level of play when you give the final score, or close to it. "... a 34-32 victory in the third round of the Division II playoffs." Later, maybe say: "Winner will play East Loser at 5 p.m. Wednesday in the semifinals."

There are ways to spread that info out over the first 4-5 grafs without using a clunky, out-of-place sentence.

 

[SoSueMe]

Not really just say, "With the victory, Podunk High advances to ... and will face Bum**** Central."

Why do you even have to say, "With the victory ...?" The loser doesn't advance.

As you probably can tell, I'm a copy editor and I've seen "with the victory" far too many times. And it gets deleted every time, yet still the same reporters keep recycling that worthless, space-killing phrase over and over and over ...

Not always. With the loss here Saturday a team actually advanced to a bowl game (Canadian thing).

Winner advanced to a better bowl and loser to a lesser bowl.

However, you can still say: Podunk now plays in Bowl A while Bum**** heads to Bowl B.

Less words, same point.