Alliteration: yes or no?

[sirvaliantbrown]

I just read Jeff MacGregor's latest, and there is this sentence: "Thus, a struggle tonight between stars and systems, individuals and institutions, despair and joy -- an apt enough American metaphor for the recent unpleasantness seen all around us."

I've been trying to not use alliteration, ever. Unlike metaphors and similes and onomatopoeia and all those other devices we memorized in high school English, it seems to me totally valueless. How does it help the reader, or the quality of our writing, if we use two words which begin with the same letter? Upon any type of reflection, it seems quite ridiculous.

But I am open to a) arguments about how our brains have been evolutionarily trained to enjoy repeated consonant sounds; b) arguments about how (Good Writer X) made great use of alliteration, so we can too; c) other arguments.

Please pacify this poster. (Ha!) Thanks.

 

[fishwrapper]

I don't believe that's alliteration, Buck.

 

[zeke12]

I like me some alliteration. Goes to poetic license.

Falling faintly, faintly falling.

 

[Flying Headbutt]

There's no hard and fast rule. Alliteration works just fine sometimes. Sometimes it's trite. So the right answer is yes, AND no.

 

[sirvaliantbrown]

There's no hard and fast rule. Alliteration works just fine sometimes. Sometimes it's trite. So the right answer is yes, AND no.

I just wonder why it "works just fine." I mean, I do it, and then I read my article, and then I think, "What did I accomplish by writing 'The woman wailed. The man moaned' instead of, you know, the same thing, but in non-alliterative words?" (Editor's note: I have never written "The woman wailed. The man moaned.")

Metaphors, similes, even onomatopoeia on rare occasions - all of these devices have very obvious functional uses. They help tell the story, to convey themes and images, etc. etc. I guess I'd like someone to tell me what the functional purpose of alliteration is.

 

[EagleMorph]

No one should set out to use various literary devices consciously, sitting at the keyboard and saying, "I have to use alliteration here, and this paragraph absolutely requires some onomatopoeing!" Even overly thought-out metaphors and similes should be avoided, in my book. There has to be a natural fit. Forcing things never works, and that goes from story development to story construction to the final revisions.

So, if the alliteration fits, use it. If there's something questionable about it, see if something else works.

 

[sirvaliantbrown]

No one should set out to use various literary devices consciously, sitting at the keyboard and saying, "I have to use alliteration here, and this paragraph absolutely requires some onomatopoeing!" Even overly thought-out metaphors and similes should be avoided, in my book. There has to be a natural fit. Forcing things never works, and that goes from story development to story construction to the final revisions.

So, if the alliteration fits, use it. If there's something questionable about it, see if something else works.

Oh, you're totally right about not forcing things. Devices have to fit. Absolutely.

My alliteration question, though, is this. You said "So, if the alliteration fits, use it." But what makes this device in particular ever "fit"?

I know what makes a metaphor fit - it's not distracting, it doesn't seem like a hyperbolic stretch, it conveys the thought or image better than straight words could, and so on. But why oh why does starting several words with the same consonant ever "work"? What is the purpose of that?

I'm not trying to be difficult - I just wonder if there's an answer other than "because sometimes that sounds good." (In which case I'd ask if there's a reason why that is so.)

 

[EagleMorph]

I'm not trying to be difficult - I just wonder if there's an answer other than "because sometimes that sounds good." (In which case I'd ask if there's a reason why that is so.)

It really is a cosmetic decision more than an actual literary device. I'd say it has more of a purpose in a column or editorial, especially a humorous one, than in a game story or expository piece. It's a more poetic piece, and subsets of alliteration - assonance and consonance - are found all the time in poetry and lyrics.

In prose, especially in sports, I'd say alliteration is more of a happy accident than a conscious effort.

 

[jlee]

In prose, especially in sports, I'd say alliteration is more of a happy accident than a conscious effort.

Ding, ding, ding.

 

[spnited]

What exactly is that MacGregor sentence about? It makes very little sense to me.

 

[Dave Kindred]

There is value in the sound that good writers create and good readers hear. Imagine MacGregor's sentence citing "stars and infrastructure, individuals and conglomerates." His version says the same thing, but its sound is more pleasing -- to this reader, at least. In addition, I bet the choice of words there fits the voice that MacGregor brought to the whole piece. Maybe the alliteration was even necessary to sustain that voice. Also: it was done so subtly as to be nearly subliminal, a good thing when the alliteration itself is not the point.

 

[goalmouth]

Like ethics, if you have to ask, you already know the answer.

 

[mediaguy]

I wouldn't overdo alliteration -- more than two or three is just circus writing. And at the risk of, well, assonance, "institutions and individuals" isn't really alliteration anyway ...

The place I see alliteration used the most -- and most awkwardly -- is in headlines, where somebody forces a verb so that it starts with the same letter as the winning mascot: Padres pummel Braves (when it's 6-5), Marlins massacre Mets (again, a 4-2 win) ...

 

[RickStain]

Alliteration: Always awesome.

 

[mustangj17]

There's no hard and fast rule. Alliteration works just fine sometimes. Sometimes it's trite. So the right answer is yes, AND no.

I just wonder why it "works just fine." I mean, I do it, and then I read my article, and then I think, "What did I accomplish by writing 'The woman wailed. The man moaned' instead of, you know, the same thing, but in non-alliterative words?" (Editor's note: I have never written "The woman wailed. The man moaned.")

Metaphors, similes, even onomatopoeia on rare occasions - all of these devices have very obvious functional uses. They help tell the story, to convey themes and images, etc. etc. I guess I'd like someone to tell me what the functional purpose of alliteration is.

Because sometimes it reads well and flows well

 

[UPChip]

In headlines, it's one of my favorite crutches.

In copy, only when it fits.

I think it was touched on earlier, but I've always believed some words carry a little zing from the spoken word to the printed because it's the reader's tendency to kind of hear them in their head.

 

[I Digress]

People prefer poetry.

 

[Joe Williams]

I know we all have "the reader's voice" in our heads as our eyeballs tracked the writing. But it seems to me that alliteration is a better device when the writing is going to be read aloud, as in a speech, and a less valuable tool when it's simply to be read silently.

(UPChip beat me to it, and I'm too lazy to hold down my delete key.)

Obvious? Okay, I'll balance with something unrelated:

Recall an old radio newsman who got his ass in a wringer when he reported on a house fire that took the lives of a couple of kids. He intro'ed it with "Two tots toasted!"

Think the result was: Freakin' fool fired.

 

[I Digress]

Warm windy weather wows woman.....

 

[I Digress]

Clap-catching creep creates chaos....