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Excellent article on the murder of Dernell Stenson

Discussion in 'Sports and News' started by BYH, Dec 31, 2007.

  1. BYH

    BYH Active Member

  2. Eagleboy

    Eagleboy Guest

    Great story indeed. My only gripe was the interjection of his career midway through the piece - it broke up the action too much. I even skipped it, went to the results of the case and then went back.
  3. BYH

    BYH Active Member

    You're talking about the part with his HS coaches, right?

    I agree completely. I did the exact same thing. Upon a second read, it made a little more sense. Still, it was a bit jarring.
  4. Eagleboy

    Eagleboy Guest

    Yes. I think he could have moved all of that just after the first star to not only help with the chronology, but not to leave it so fractured midway through. After he mentions that Stenson was found with the skin torn from his hands, he should have gone right to the outcome. In fact, it would go a long way to quote Corona and Zamora about that sight.
  5. terrier

    terrier Well-Known Member

    It certainly explains why he never made it in Boston despite all the hype he got after Mo Vaughn left town.
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