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Another piece

Discussion in 'Writers' Workshop' started by JD, Nov 1, 2007.

  1. JD

    JD Member


    Check it out, let me know what you think. Thanks in advance.
  2. jlee

    jlee Well-Known Member

    I'd slim down the lede a little. There's a lot of info that can wait until later. Let the readers know the Wolves backs are against the wall, but say that they lost, making Thursday's game a must-win, a little quicker.

    I'd avoid "not so fast" anywhere outside of a column. And "too little too late" is unnecessary also.

    You answered "what does this mean" well, and I came away feeling I knew a decent amount about Woodland soccer just by reading the article.
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