.... and the horse you rode in on

Above is an AP second-day story. Any thoughts/comments on the lede?

 

How about: Pathetic.

 

It's humorous in a I'm-laughing-at-you-not-with-you sort of way.

 

Clever, kinda. But poorly worded.

 

That about sums it up.

 

Well no wonder he rushed for so many yards. According to this lede, it sounds like everyone else on the field was a white guy.

 

Personally, I thought it was a yeoman's effort.

Yo, man, that sucked.

 

I enjoyed it.

 

"rode in on to..."

I'm no grammarian, but isn't there some kind of law about using three consecutive two-letter words? Or at least a rule against using back-to-back prepositions?

The wording is just plain clunky to me.

 

Modal verbs plus more prepositions means trouble.

With a few exceptions, I hate clever ledes in gamers. Just tell the fucking game story. If I want to be dazzled with wit I'll read David Sedaris.

 

Atop a field so blanched with snow, the horse on which Shaun Alexander rode went unnoticed.
Alexander’s heroic 201-yard performance on a career-high 40 carries across the snow-covered turf Monday night did far more than rescue Seattle from a 21-12 deficit in the second half to beat the Green Bay Packers. It returned Alexander to his league MVP level of 2005 after three months of irrelevance caused by a badly bruised left foot that eventually became broken and caused a seven-week layoff.

 

Yes. The rule that says I would have re-written that lede top to bottom.