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Young journalist looking for feedback

Discussion in 'Journalism topics only' started by MaxPetrunya, May 26, 2006.

  1. spaceman

    spaceman Active Member

    See? I didn't look over it carefully.

    But fortunately, I have people around me who do ;)

    In a column about LeBron, it would be helpful to spell his name right.
  2. I don't have much to say about the substance of the column, but at one point, he refered to Cavs coach Mike Brown as Mike Davis.
  3. John

    John Well-Known Member

    Feedback's bad. [SNLJesseJacksonskit/]
  4. shotglass

    shotglass Guest

    That's really not a bad start. You write better than most people your age, and you write cleaner.

    But there's a difference between commentary with style and a series of gag lines. The better columnists learn the difference between the two. Ask around about better ways to describe things than to use some pop-culture comparison.
  5. farmerjerome

    farmerjerome Active Member

    I can't help it. No one has mentioned pho-real yet? Slipping.
  6. the_rookie

    the_rookie Member

    Only use "I" if you have to.
  7. Norman Stansfield

    Norman Stansfield Active Member

    Don't use I...EVER.

    And it's Mike Brown, not Mike Davis. (Yeah, I know, third time it's been mentioned...I'm just being a smart ass)
  8. RayKinsella

    RayKinsella Member

    No. 1 rule, make sure you get your facts straight. It is "Teen Wolf Too"

  9. TheHandOfGod

    TheHandOfGod New Member

    Good movie.
  10. zagoshe

    zagoshe Well-Known Member

    Here is the best advice I can give to you kid......

    Read every thread about the state of this business, the cuts in jobs, the shrinking circulation, at least twice then enroll in a master's program and begin a career in a different field.....
  11. Tierra

    Tierra New Member

    Good point, Zagoshe.

    Any J-school that doesn't require students to double-major (for their own sake as much as anything) should be shut down.
  12. OneMoreRead

    OneMoreRead Member


    I disagree to an extent with zagoshe.

    Sure, the future of this business doesn't look too bright sometimes. But there always has been and always will be room in this business for good reporters and story tellers.

    If this is what you want to do, then keep asking questions. Read as much as you can, gamers, investigative work, enterprise and columns. Read the other sections. Read Leonard Pitts! Read magazines, books, poems and short stories. Immerse your brain in finding the best words to reflect your reporting.

    Be accurate.
    Be accurate.
    Be accurate.
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