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Writing about interceptions

Discussion in 'Journalism topics only' started by Mr. X, Nov 14, 2010.

  1. Mr. X

    Mr. X Member

    What is the best way to write this?

    Quarterback John Doe had three passes intercepted, quarterback John Doe threw three interceptions or is there a better alternative?

    Thanks in advance for your help.
  2. Mystery Meat II

    Mystery Meat II Well-Known Member

    The latter option:

    Jake Delhomme threw six interceptions before being benched with 7:35 left in the first quarter.
  3. Dick Whitman

    Dick Whitman Well-Known Member

    Always go with active voice.
  4. Mark2010

    Mark2010 Active Member

    Agreed. He threw 'em, you write 'em. Let the parents whine all they want.
  5. Mr. X

    Mr. X Member

    I was intending all along to include the fact the quarterback threw three interceptions in the story, along with his name. I just needed to know the best terminology, because I have been told in the past I used the wrong terminology.
  6. LevinTBlack

    LevinTBlack Member

    Definitely the later. The less you can use mundane words like "had" that are boring, bog down stories and make it sound old the better the story will be.
  7. Stitch

    Stitch Active Member

    You don't want to make Delhomme or his parents feel bad. It's OK to leave out his name.
  8. jlee

    jlee Well-Known Member

    Or "Shittville's defense picked off quarterback John Doe three times."
  9. murphyc

    murphyc Well-Known Member

    Is this another Brett Favre thread? :D
  10. Hank_Scorpio

    Hank_Scorpio Active Member

    Always use active voice.

    Just like in headlines:
    Aggies shocked by Eastern Michigan
    (You see this a lot on the major sports sites, because they think they have to get a ranked team mentioned first).

    Eastern Michigan shocks Aggies
    (This is more succinct, better worded and more active).
  11. Versatile

    Versatile Active Member

    Hank, "Aggies shocked by Eastern Michigan" is used on websites for search engine optimization. Getting the team that's more likely to be Googled first puts your results higher on the Google search.
  12. Ace

    Ace Well-Known Member

    Mr. X

    Technically, both of your choices are grammatically incorrect.

    Had denotes consent.

    Presumably, the QB didn't intend to throw the ball to the other team.

    Plus had is an exceedingly boring word.

    On the second, he didn't throw three interceptions. He threw three passes that were intercepted.

    But the meaning is clear, and I say "threw three interceptions" all the time.
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