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This is writing

Discussion in 'Journalism topics only' started by Alma, Aug 29, 2013.

  1. Alma

    Alma Well-Known Member

  2. Songbird

    Songbird Well-Known Member

    Falstaffian and Vonnegut references in the first 500 words.

    When do Kafka, Papa and Orwell make their appearances in the story?
  3. Alma

    Alma Well-Known Member

    I'm of the school that you can flout if you settle in. The story does.
  4. Songbird

    Songbird Well-Known Member

    It does settle in. Not your everyday story.

    Nicely done.
  5. FileNotFound

    FileNotFound Well-Known Member

    Wow, that's a helluva read. Brought it back around nicely at the end.
  6. Versatile

    Versatile Active Member

    Spencer Hall is my favorite sports writer.
  7. JackReacher

    JackReacher Well-Known Member

    And one of the most annoying Twitter users on the planet.
  8. SockPuppet

    SockPuppet Active Member

    An excellent read. Another story I finish and say, "Fucking shit, why should I even try anymore?" :)
  9. Gold

    Gold Active Member

    What it takes is time, space, and rewriting. Get all the details and use them.
  10. sprtswrtr10

    sprtswrtr10 Member

    Well, I had to finish it once I began.

    Liked it.
    One thing I noticed.
    But for the dialogue, the paragraphs, compared to what you usually see in the paper (and the way I usually write them in my paper) or quite a big a longer. It was just something I noticed and I think it worked to make the whole story move faster. You know, fewer returns keep the eyes busy. About the ending. It was a abrupt, but that also worked.
  11. Versatile

    Versatile Active Member

    Short paragraphs have bastardized newspaper sports writing. I blame the Los Angeles Times.

    But to say this level of writing is a matter of "time, space and rewriting" is demeaning. For one, Hall oversees all of SB Nation's editorial operations as well as his own blog, which he posts on several times a day. Furthermore, there simply aren't many writers who can turn a phrase at his level.

    It's the big stuff, like:

    And it's the little stuff, like:

    Spencer Hall is a better writer than most people.
  12. 93Devil

    93Devil Well-Known Member

    I know we are talking about the story, but the design of this page was very odd. No pictures of the actual person and no actual mention of him in the head or sub.

    The art shows a double hold and the other pic shows an OL screwing up.

    I liked the story, but the layout was very strange.
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