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The P.E. teacher with a World Series ring

Discussion in 'Journalism topics only' started by Michael Echan, Jun 2, 2008.

  1. Michael Echan

    Michael Echan Member

  2. thegrifter

    thegrifter Member

    I got so bored with the lede, I gave up on it. Sounds like an interesting story, but the opening just died on me.
  3. imjustagirl

    imjustagirl Active Member

    I thought it was fine, but I thought the last two lines were a bit off.
  4. mustangj17

    mustangj17 Active Member

    P.E. teacher? Baseball? Isn't there a movie about this called the rookie?

    I bet he was a math teacher and I'm totally off, but whatever.
  5. imjustagirl

    imjustagirl Active Member

    Did you even read the story?
  6. tapintoamerica

    tapintoamerica Well-Known Member

    Nice piece of work to get the guy to talk. The writing wasn't brilliant, but it was certainly solid.
  7. Tom Petty

    Tom Petty Guest

    i'm guessing the answer is B.
  8. goalmouth

    goalmouth Well-Known Member

    Thought this was about Buddy Biancalana.
  9. fishwrapper

    fishwrapper Active Member

    Incredible subject. Especially given the current goings-on with Yankee ownership.
    Well reported. Multiple sources inside and outside the organization.
    But good Lord, it could have used a 33% reduction.
  10. Mizzougrad96

    Mizzougrad96 Active Member

    I don't understand why this is a big deal. Plenty of athletes go into other fields after their playing careers are done. Not everyone who plays pro sports is set for life after they retire from Pro sports.
  11. Monroe Stahr

    Monroe Stahr Member

    Sentence No. 1: "It's a warm, sun-drenched weekday morning . . ."
    Sentence No. 2: "Under a cloudless sky . . ."

    Choose one, pal, and get on with the freakin' story.
    By the way, you wouldn't be distantly related to Grantland Rice, would you?
  12. Mizzougrad96

    Mizzougrad96 Active Member

    It's definitely overwritten.
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