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Sublime or overwritten?

Discussion in 'Journalism topics only' started by Alma, Mar 24, 2011.

  1. Alma

    Alma Well-Known Member

    http://sports.espn.go.com/espn/commentary/news/story?id=6243391
     
  2. Mizzougrad96

    Mizzougrad96 Active Member

    Overwritten.
     
  3. Ace

    Ace Well-Known Member

    Unable to comment. Could not get past third graf.
     
  4. dirtybird

    dirtybird Active Member

    Initially I said overwritten, but after thinking about it, I guess he could be going for a Tom Wolfe-esque style of writing. But even when you account for the sort of gonzo-type descriptions and flowery language, it's still pretty overwritten. That says A LOT.
     
  5. jlee

    jlee Active Member

    Not a big fan of MacGregor, so I obviously think it's overwritten, but it was still enjoyable and I'm glad I read it.
     
  6. ringer

    ringer Member

    I thought it was spare and vivid, but the opening sentence didn't fit at all, so it got off to a pretentious and gratuitous start.
     
  7. FreddiePatek

    FreddiePatek Active Member

    Good subject, but yes, a little overcooked. Could have pulled back just a little bit. Just my opinion. I've been just as guilty on stories half as good.
     
  8. Matt Stephens

    Matt Stephens Well-Known Member

    That's because the first three paragraphs were not in English.
     
  9. YGBFKM

    YGBFKM Guest

    This is exactly what I'm talking about. Who is McGregor writing that for? The readers of ESPN.com? I doubt it.
     
  10. JimmyHoward33

    JimmyHoward33 Well-Known Member

    Second paragraph just makes no sense to me. None. What's the big-T tournament?
     
  11. rmanfredi

    rmanfredi Active Member

    He means "The Tournament" - i.e. the NCAA tournament. "Big-T" as in "upper-case T" versus "lower-case T."

    Or possibly a Tecmo Bowl tournament.
     
  12. 21

    21 Well-Known Member

    Or as Hemingway said, in a lot less words, 'Anyone can be a fisherman in May.'
     
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