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Poor transition/quote interface

Discussion in 'Journalism topics only' started by Simon_Cowbell, Apr 16, 2008.

  1. Simon_Cowbell

    Simon_Cowbell Active Member

    This is from the interior of a story about the Marlins beating the Braves 4-0. I see this way too much in stories. Can anyone explain this phenomenon and why it happens?

    The Braves, who hit some balls hard, were impressed with Olsen's effort.

    "We hit some balls a ton, but they caught them," manager Bobby Cox said. "[Jair] Jurrjens gives up two runs, and we have to win."
  2. PeteyPirate

    PeteyPirate Guest

    Can you specify what it is in here that you're seeing way too much?
  3. I'll take a stab: The quote repeats what he just wrote. "Braves hit balls hard" "We hit a ton"

    It's lazy and evidence someone is formulaic or trying to fill an inch count with nothing.
  4. PHINJ

    PHINJ Active Member

    Is this an AP story?
  5. Simon_Cowbell

    Simon_Cowbell Active Member

    Where is there, anywhere, an inkling in the quote that the Braves were "impressed by Olsen's effort"?
  6. forever_town

    forever_town Active Member

    That's precisely what I was going to speculate before I saw this post.

    It's even worse than having you quote someone who says basically the exact same thing you said before the quote.

    Eg: Orioles manager Dave Trembley said he was disappointed with Roberts' lack of hustle.
    "I'm disappointed that Roberts didn't hustle," Trembley said.
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