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One sentence and, boy, am I tired

Discussion in 'Anything goes' started by trifectarich, Dec 29, 2008.

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  1. Paper Dragon

    Paper Dragon Member

    I agree with Mikey. The payoff at the end made it worth it to me. The rest was long and wordy, but the bizarre style was compelling enough to keep me reading. I knew there was something coming and it didn't disappoint.
     
    Paper Dragon, Dec 30, 2008
    #37
  2. Guy_Incognito

    Guy_Incognito Well-Known Member

    Anyone?
     
    Guy_Incognito, Dec 30, 2008
    #38
  3. Football_Bat

    Football_Bat Well-Known Member

    I would've done away with the ellipses, put the nut part of the sentence up front and turned the rest into bullet points.
     
    Football_Bat, Dec 30, 2008
    #39
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