Lars Anderson's SI piece on Tuscaloosa

Nope. But am sure he's saying to himself "even though this will end up in BASW 2011, that kid who keeps posting jobs on SportsJournalists.com is right! It would have been better that way. How did I ever get hired here?"
That factual thingy YankeessSuck mentioned? Little more concrete....

 

Come on Slappy, Anderson really wants to know what some intern thinks of his writing. Maybe we should get the two of them together so the intern can coach Anderson on writing.

 

Thought the story was well written. The detail he got from the long-snapper was very personal, made it even more compelling. No complaints here.

 

I just think the dude has a cool name.

Lars.

As Beavis would say, "It kicks ass!!!"

 

Maybe a conversation about different styles of writing and story construction can (gasp!) make us better. How/why did something work or not work? Hmm, sounds like discussing sports journalism.

 

Didn't you fail as a sportswriter in Podunk, North Dakota? Why are you still here?

 

Stop being a tool, no vowels.

 

Isn't that what this message board is for? See nearly every response on every other thread. I'd love to have a place dedicated to people who are more courteous ("Anyone hear anything about this job?" "You're hired!" etc.) and cared more about discussing sports journalism. Apparently some of the board members (Stitch, et. al) don't and hijack threads with their consistent trolling.

 

Anyone else see the courteous irony here with Mr. Mxyzptlk's doas I say and not as I do?
Anderson's piece was written well, needed factual help. If, on your best day, you're half as good as him in style and accuracy, I would suppose you could land your dream job -- whatever that may be.
Instead you offer supposition on style to make yourself feel you've put your education to good use.
Nothing wrong with Anderson's story conceptually.

 

Anderson's story is brilliant, but if 15 people had the same material, I imagine there would have been 15 different stories. I'm just throwing ideas out at how it could be different, as well as discussing whether certain devices worked. I happen to like using the "tell the first part of a story at the beginning and conclude with it" outline.

As a side note: It's indicative about this site that about 5 people posted discussing the piece after my initial question and 2-3 people responded with taking potshots.

 

Just my two cents--didn't like way it was written. I knew the outcome of the Harrison story and I still skipped and skimmed ahead until I found where he brought it to closure.

Just made the story disjointed from this reader's view.

 

I thought it was well written, and I was OK with the structure. The baseball team finding the white dress hit me pretty hard.

I found one thing odd: The baseball player from Oklahoma called his dad to ask what he needed to do. I figured every Oklahoma kid learns that information early in life.