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Is this lead misleading?

Discussion in 'Journalism topics only' started by slappy4428, Oct 3, 2011.

  1. imjustagirl

    imjustagirl Active Member

    Right, but all we had was the first two sentences. Slappy's bringing in shit from the rest of the story, without a link, so there's no way for me to know where the school was or who was interviewed or wasn't. He asked if the lede was misleading without telling us the rest of the story.
     
  2. Ace

    Ace Well-Known Member

    True. Slappy's being stingy with the links.
     
  3. imjustagirl

    imjustagirl Active Member

    I mean, I get it. You don't want to out the writer, assuming it's a no-name guy. We kind of have that rule. But some more details as to the content of the story would have helped make the call easier.
     
  4. Ace

    Ace Well-Known Member

    We can agree that Slappy spelled "lead" wrong though.
     
  5. slappy4428

    slappy4428 Active Member

    Rest of the story mentions nothing about the coach. Nada. The reference in the first two paragraphs is never heard from again, then continues to cumguzzle the Big College defense for the next 600 words
     
  6. Ace

    Ace Well-Known Member

    I don't like that. Don't tease me with a damn home-cooked meal. Bring the mashed potatoes.
     
  7. noahl

    noahl New Member

    it sucks. it's badly worded and leaves it unclear whether the coach actually did anything attributed to him, or whether we should understand that this is a theoretical situation, which the writer could have remedied with a "probably" and "would." but the lede still would have stunk because it's so slow in developing. And did it really stretch over two short grafs, or is that your rendering of it? no matter, the concept was cool -- placing us in the family room of a coach who'd earned a quiet reward -- but the execution was horrible.
     
  8. 93Devil

    93Devil Well-Known Member

    And then have a snack!
     
  9. 93Devil

    93Devil Well-Known Member

    Coach James probably was hoping for a nice easy weekend of rest while Pegleg State enjoyed the bye week before their matchup with State U.

    That weekend of rest could have been cut short if they watched the impressive State U win over State Tech on Saturday.

    State U looked so good, Pegleg might have start preparing early Sunday morning.


    yada yada yada yada yada

    Is this what they were trying to say?
     
  10. slappy4428

    slappy4428 Active Member

    probably.
     
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