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Coach Feetch

Discussion in 'Writers' Workshop' started by LemMan, Jan 10, 2007.

  1. LemMan

    LemMan Member

    Fire away, ladies and gents...

  2. pallister

    pallister Guest

    No shortcuts, indeed. This story's way too long. ;D
  3. Angola!

    Angola! Guest

    I really liked your opening. I thought you tied it all back in very well. Good story, though on the lengthy side.
    I know some don't like to break stories up with subheads - DyePack says hi - but I thought it worked really well in this instance.
  4. hackhack

    hackhack New Member

    For your audience, this guy has been such a success that this story deserves its length. What kind of reaction did it get? Was it what you hoped for?

    Wondering if you didn't pick a quote for your ending, how would you have ended it?
  5. LemMan

    LemMan Member

    hack -

    I got a couple of complimentary phone calls. As for what reaction I was hoping for, I gave up trying to gauge public reaction long ago. I was happy with it, though, and it's rare I can read over one of my stories and not pick it apart.

    Thanks for posting.
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