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An incredibly sad, well-reported, well-written profile ...

Discussion in 'Journalism topics only' started by militantoysterdog, Jan 29, 2007.

  1. I don't read the Daily News much. But this was great.

  2. JayFarrar

    JayFarrar Well-Known Member

    That was a good article. Not very well-edited, its arrested, not arrrested, but shows the power of being there as opposed to doing it on the phone.
  3. TheSportsPredictor

    TheSportsPredictor Well-Known Member

    How long til they write that story about 4th-and-26 Freddie Mitchell?
  4. Montezuma's Revenge

    Montezuma's Revenge Active Member

    Good story.

    Sloppy, slopping editing all over it.

    I'd have preferred to see most of the player-assistance stuff as short sider. I thought it got away of the human story a little bit. I'd have left some of the too-proud-to-ask-for-help stuff in the main story but pulled most of the rest of it out as a short separate.
  5. NoOneLikesUs

    NoOneLikesUs Active Member

    It seems like I'm reading one of these profiles of ex-80s NFL players at least once a week. And everytime I read them, I get a little angrier with the league.
  6. strong piece by Gary

    i'm not crazy about the voice -- said works better than says, especially if you change voice in midstreak

    but, damn, he got some great quotes from a lot of people and told the story without getting in the way

    nice work, Gary
  7. Frank_Ridgeway

    Frank_Ridgeway Well-Known Member

    He never gets in the way. He is a reporter first, writer second, and that's what leads to work like this.
  8. shockey

    shockey Active Member

    gary rocks when he does pieces like this. 8) 8) 8)
  9. I read the story and couldn't help but think what a better writer would have done with the same information, but I guess you can't really have it both ways.
  10. Frank_Ridgeway

    Frank_Ridgeway Well-Known Member

    I don't know, Ike. Gary was good enough for Dave Smith, so I suppose he's good enough for me.
  11. Bears00

    Bears00 Member

    Good story. Liked the way it was presented.
  12. friend of the friendless

    friend of the friendless Active Member

    Sirs, Madames,

    Heart-breaking. Emotion and reporting over-ride the editing.

    YHS, etc
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