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Your lede should be short and snappy. Keep it to 20 words or less. It should draw the reader in with the most important thing and you don't need to have facts, figures and who scored what that high in a story.Also, you don't put a dateline (in this case, NEW YORK - should be all caps) unless you were actually AT the event.You also could use a little work on commas, where they're needed, where they're not, as well as capitalization. In this case, I wouldn't capitalize tournament or National Champion/ship.You've got good information here. One thing that really sets great pieces apart from lackluster ones are quotes. Quotes really make a story, in my opinion, because they make it more real than THIS PERSON scored THIS MANY POINTS and did THIS. That's where the emotion comes from. I know in a story like this, it's not easy to get quotes yourself (while you're still learning, you might scour the AP wire, look at the Dayton and Chapel Hill papers and see what quotes they have. Then look and see where you might insert them in your story to make your grafs stronger. Also, some institutions put out press releases following the game with a quotes section. Look at those and see what you'd use, what you'd discard and where you'd use it.)
Especially for a game like this, most of the press conferences won't be OVER an hour after the game ends. Then, the reporters have to transcribe their quotes and put it into a brief that has most likely already been put on their Web site.Not even the AP is going to get you a full gamer with quotes one hour after a game. More like two hours.
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